Help needed (promo code in return)

Discussion in 'General Game Discussion and Questions' started by Carlos, Oct 18, 2009.

  1. Carlos

    Carlos Well-Known Member

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    Hi,
    as I'm not a native english speaker, I need some help regarding our game's description. In return I will share some promo codes between the best 5 or 10 advisors, as soon as the next update for Libra balance will be available (within 2 weeks, hopefully).

    Below is the current description for the LITE version. What could be improved (including bad english ;-)) in order to make it more attractive?

    Thank you in advance!

    If you like labyrinth games then you'll definitely like this one. This unique and highly addictive 3D balance puzzler will bring fun and challenge to you!

    *** Features of the paid version ***
    MORE levels
    FREE updates

    [Demanding graphics]

    Libra comes with an original ‘dirty industrial’ design.
Fast, OpenGL based 3D-rendering, combined with accurate physics and exciting levels result in an addictive game, ensuring many hours of challenging fun.

    [Fast, engaging gameplay]

    You should also try ‘Medium’ and ‘Hard’ modes, which bring new gameplay excitement for the advanced players.

    [Auto save]
    
Pressing the home button or picking up the phone mid-game doesn’t mean that your well-deserved points are lost.
The current scene gets restored based on your choice upon the next run.

    [Background music and sound effects]

    The fast, slick and mean techno groove with its highly infectious beat fits the game very well. However you can disable the music and the effects anytime – and rather listen to your favorite iTunes music.

    For ingame videos please visit http://www.youtube.com/user/knyisztor

    The next update for the paid version is coming soon! What's new:
    - 10 training levels
    - 10 new levels (ancient theme)
    - easier gameplay
    - global highscores
    - submit highscores to Twitter and Facebook
    - invite friends to compete
    - reworked graphics​
     
  2. IpodLady

    IpodLady Well-Known Member

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    Sent ya a pm with some help. :)
     
  3. Carlos

    Carlos Well-Known Member

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    Thank you, I already applied your ideas! :)
     
  4. IpodLady

    IpodLady Well-Known Member

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    You're welcome Carlos. Glad i was of some help to you.

    Good luck to ya and all your future games. :)
     
  5. Devilishly Good

    Devilishly Good Well-Known Member

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    I sent you a PM as well Carlos with my suggestions on improving the description.
     

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