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Featured by Apple all around the world - Need feedback on App Store Page!

05-12-2012, 07:56 AM
#1
Joined: Aug 2011
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Featured by Apple all around the world - Need feedback on App Store Page!

Hi there! Our game (Snabbit) is suddenly featured in New & Noteworthy sections all over the world (both for iPhone, iPad, and Mac). We're getting incredibly exposure right now, and it would be really sad if we end up underutilizing it because of a poor landing page.

As a team of two developers from Norway, we're hoping to get some help and feedback regarding our App Store page. What kind of screenshots would you like to see? In what order? Is the copy okay? Do you have any other tips?

We are tremendously thankful for any kind of feedback, and we're more than happy to give any helpful posters codes for the Mac-version (we don't have any left for iOS).

Landing page: http://itunes.apple.com/us/app/snabbit/id504870503?ls=1&mt=8


Best regards,

Sindre
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05-14-2012, 04:48 AM
#2
Joined: Feb 2012
Posts: 22
Congrats on that one.

No, the copywriting of the App description is not good. You've highlighted so many things all in STARS, but it fails to communicate effectively to the user what the App actually does.

The icon and the screenshots are very good.

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05-14-2012, 05:07 AM
#3
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Originally Posted by AppVersal View Post
Congrats on that one.

No, the copywriting of the App description is not good. You've highlighted so many things all in STARS, but it fails to communicate effectively to the user what the App actually does.

The icon and the screenshots are very good.
Congratulations on winning the lottery! I never understood how Apple decides who gets featured and who doesn't would be great if we had some idea?
05-14-2012, 09:46 AM
#4
Just bought your game to try out. Congrats on the feature.

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05-14-2012, 09:48 AM
#5
Joined: Dec 2009
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Originally Posted by lolzappan View Post
Congratulations on winning the lottery! I never understood how Apple decides who gets featured and who doesn't would be great if we had some idea?
make quality games ?
05-14-2012, 10:37 AM
#6
Joined: Jan 2011
Location: UK
Posts: 195
Congrats on the feature
The noseless Snabbit design is bizarrely cute, congrats also to whoever came up with that one

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Originally Posted by mr.Ugly View Post
make quality games ?
+1
05-14-2012, 11:58 AM
#7
Joined: Mar 2012
Location: Singapore
Posts: 27
Great news!
Congrats dude. =)
Do share the effects of being featured on sales. Hehe. =P

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05-14-2012, 12:42 PM
#8
Joined: Mar 2010
Location: Sweden
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Remove the anonymous quotes/ratings. Add a bit of information on the game mechanics so the buyers know what they are buying. Oh and remove the word "addictive".
05-15-2012, 10:04 PM
#9
Joined: Sep 2009
Location: Colorado
Posts: 5,245
Congrats.

I honestly don't see a lot you can change on the copy, seems fine to me.
05-18-2012, 05:14 PM
#10
Joined: Feb 2009
Location: UK
Posts: 42
I went to the page to review your text and ended up buying it :-) so I suppose it was good enough for me.

P.s. great game